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I appreciate the response, so thanks -- I'm pretty new, too, so that was definately helpful; it's always good to have an insider's view of how a forum works.

Creepy as hell, very enthralling, and not overly descriptive but giving a very clear picture of what's going on. In a sick kind of way I enjoyed reading this - ...

sorry. I'm of the 'poetry = figurative language' camp, not 'poetry = trappings of verse', which I guess makes me kind of pretentious now that I think about it, but ...

prose poem for a night out on the town People pretend and tell how they cry to the moon then merely stand amazed at her curves for a moment, at ...

A memorial doesn't have to dance around meaning, but it should have something more in it - an image of what it was really like to be with her, poetic ...

I enjoyed reading this -- the linebreaks were a nice sight to see, they gave a much more natural flow to the poem [sometimes people new to a form panic ...

Where the heck are the critiques on this? It started out really well and ended well also, even if it did descend into abstract apostrophe in the middle. You have ...

I liked this poem -- it had such a strong atmosphere and so I enjoyed that aspect of it alot. The ending is very strong as well. Overall criticism... connecting ...

This is all of a short story in need of critique. If this is too long for one post -- I'm not sure how it's supposed to go with finished ...

cube. box box box box box box box box box. sorry man XP I think this would work better if both box lines in each stanza were combined into one ...

I agree with the second part of oregongirl's comment. [this time, at least]. The rhymes were kind of cute but it's really hard to tell where you're going. Are you ...

The fact that this piece describes a specific story but could apply to many generic romances is definately a downfall. There's a whole specific history and culture behind that story ...

Then ending of this is simple and effective, and I liked it a lot; but the beginning is too simplistic and straightforward...I think it would work better if you implied ...

I crit poetry most of the time, so usually two [maybe three] a day - sometimes more, sometimes less, depending on if I have time. I crit two/three different places, ...

The repetition: agreed with Chandni. Usually to make repetition work it needs to be used in different ways each time it appears, and so take on slightly different meanings each ...